Sunday, March 7, 2010

1. After the death of Great Afred in 899, his beloved son permanently became the following King
2. In the 10th century, the crazy Scandinavians suddenly attacked beautiful England
3.Old Norway carefully landed large land in North with 15.000 single men in 1066
4. The handsome Harold and jealous Normans continuously fought at the Battle of Hasting
5. The bad William ordered the rich population and their huge lands- property to unacceptable give some money for tax purpose
6. In the 15th century, the useful English textile industry was steadily established
7. Unthinking William accidently died in 1120
8. Stupid Civil war and useful lawlessness broke out quickly
9. Henry's favorite nephew was happily welcome by nice England people
10. The strong support of the powerful church and big Nation successfully made weak Stephen become a good King
11. The old King was incidently captured
12. Little Henry III became a young King certainly at the early age of 9
13. In 1327, sensitive Eward was awfully murdered
14. Brave Richard supprisingly brought cute Henry back to power
15. 6 months later, unregretting Henry was lonely imprisoned in the beautiful Tower of London

2 comments:

  1. Very nice and original web site, I like the presentation. Your writting is great to read and I really appreciate your good grammar, I m going to take some notes! ;-)

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  2. These sentences look a lot better than your objective history sentences.

    Here are some suggestions for you:

    1. great Afred (capitalize & spelling)
    1. his loved = his beloved
    1. became permanently (WO)

    2. the 10th what (AW)
    2. Scandinavian (plural)
    2. attacked suddently (spelling & WO)
    2. suddently on beautiful (OW)

    3. landed carefully (WO)
    3. "large North land" doesn't make sense
    3. 15000 (PUNC)

    4. fought continuously (WO)
    4. ______ Battle of Hasting (AW)

    5. ______ rich population (AW)
    5. ordered them to do what????
    5. -property for tax purpose unfairly (doesn't make sense)

    6. In ___ 15th _______ (AW)
    6. was established steadily (WO)

    7. died accidently (WO)

    9. was welcome happily (WO & WF)

    10. made successfully (WO)

    11. was captured incidently

    12. The little Henry (OW)
    12. Remove "certainly"

    13. was murdered awfully (WL+O)

    14 "surprisingly" modifies "brought"; put them in the correct word order form

    15. 6months
    15. was imprisoned lonely

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